Anorexics and Fudge Cake:

A "lovely" interior monologue. Your approach of the topic had a nice mixture of hopeless serenity... if that's possible. And you have a good writing style. (Avigon)

Beautifully written...gives excellent and explicit detail about what it's like to be sexually abused and have no one to tell. (Bre Vallado)

Very sad and dark story, yet beautiful writing.(Joelle C)


Broken:

"Spooky. interesting though, very interesting. The imagery is really good. just so eerie, for lack of anything better to say." (Neireid Rising)

"I really like the idea of the blueness seeping into the girl...The idea of slipping unobtrusively into the nite is also good...Great job." (Kapu Lea)



Broken Home:

"Ouch...sad poem. Hurts me just to read it. I'm all for expressing your feelings, but please don't condemn the entire male race...unless you're Lesbian (kidding) it's a good poem, but depressing,sad, all around a real mood buster. I think that poems should be writen to bring joy to others, or to express something bad that happened...but not that much. Think about it. If someone was really depressed and read your poem it could have done alot of damamge. What about if someone was to get married tomorrow and read your poem the day before. Imagine the emotional struggles. I'm sorry if this review hurt you in any way but pleae think before writing something so strong." (Seiten)

"You know what? I'll have to disagree with the person who reviewed last. I agree with this poem, and really love is just a rare occurance in today's world. Sure, I may speak for it but it's not something that's really going to happen that we all should mope about.

Good job on the poem, it's got a great meaning that I think a lot would agree to. Keep writing, I'm envious of your writing ability!! :D" (Anon)

Shadow Coma:

"NO! Why!? [Sobs uncontrollably] Why did he have to wait so long and not make it back in time!? That ending is so sad. I loved the story very, very much. Until I got to the end! (No! I love the ending. It's just that it's something I wish didn't happen! Oh well, it's your story...)" (Bellarina)

"That was a really great story, it really makes someone think." (Behind the Facade)



Crazy:

"Wow. That was amazing. I love how you capture the mind of a schizo, and how even the most insane person, the one who knows the world thinks that their insane, can't see why they're any different, they beleive themselves perfectly sane. And how they think that all the hallucinations and stuff are real, that was so good, so deep, i loved it!" (Anarchist Girl)

So I sit:

"Your poem hit something inside of me through the beautiful and dark context that it was written.
You are talented, keep it up" (SilentWind)

Anyone who wants to review my work, please feel free to e-mail me. My address is ravengoth1078@hotmail.com.